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Updated: 2017-09-13T20:36:43.026+02:00


...I keep forgetting how "big"we used to be...and ...


...I keep forgetting how "big"we used to be...and how magic it all was. Time made the glitter turn to sand in my eyes. Somehow I fear glitter now....somehow I loathe glitter:... Sand is more real. it is dull, sad, but wouldn't fade. but you keep making me remember...and I then I start to dream again...I am blessed, and so touched.. love . me

Wonderful.Brilliant.The first four lines add not m...




The first four lines add not much to my faculties. I liked the four lines that follow because I could relate to them and could see what was going on, and then comes “Sulphuric was the smell of my childhood” which swept me off my feet and blew my mind off. I do not know what lingers exactly about it, but it is just a lovely sentence.

At “And stars we were” the shift in mood is very successful (I felt that this was 1992), and until “One corner at a time” I can see the whole narrative of your life then. By the time she holds your hand and tells you what the city is, “And I inhaled it so I won’t forget” comes in very powerful (good). I also liked “You lit the church in candles,” but the five lines that follow it simply do not penetrate me. What follows thence is nice, until “Remnants of glitter under your eyes” which is wonderful imagery. “Like splinters of the cross” is absolutely astounding, and I think of it as the highest peak in this poem. I also especially loved the three lines that followed, patriciously weak and delicate as they are. Even what remains is quite pleasant.

I loved this poem.